The Life After : IV


A drabble is a form of microfiction that renders a work of fiction exactly in 100 words. This is the concluding part of a quartet of 55-fiction posts. However I chose to post it as a drabble to grant myself the liberty of 45 extra words.



“A year.. nothing has altered.. the tears, the despair… the solitude, the anguish.  We strived to thrive in our asunder worlds, but foundered in severing the bonds and fetters of love.
The silver Maybach quivered vehemently on the colossal bridge. He pressed down the accelerator.. Tears blurred his sight. I was shackled by invisible manacles, helpless. The Maybach crashed against the cast palisade and whizzed into the air.
From the dazed mob emerged a smile, a smile I had missed for long. His eyes gleamed with an ethereal bliss, as he gazed into my eyes. Our worlds have united again.”

18 Opinions:

Shadow Girl said...

Beautiful..a sombre expression of love..loved it :D

The West Wind said...

Thank U

Tulika said...

dense.. really dense.

reverberating verbiage.

Mural! said...

very nice, but I liked your bigger writings more, I think these are like T20 and I am an ODI&tests guy :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

I guess i didnt read it the way it has to be....
lemmi try again :)

Neha said...

oh my, I got goose bumps while reading this part..so beautifully written..there was a kind of happy feeling in the sad episode..

PS: I know the comment does not make sense; but still :P

comfortablynam said...

The smile and ethereal bliss..What a way to end the buildup of the last 4 posts.

Sad..touched a chord..but still provides relief..

Megha said...

Oh ...sad ending :(
but beautifully written...really nice

nil said...

Sigh.
Loved it.
Period.

Oh and Im sorry to have pissed out on the last 2 posts, had been busy with boars!
have read them, nevertheless :-)

Chandrika Shubham said...

Deep feelings are nicely expressed.
Beautiful blog with very pleasant color combination. :)

Sorcerer said...

very nice...and..its well written as to capture all the emotions and express it in such short frame.

The West Wind said...

@Tulika: Thank U for the kind words..

@Mural: Hehe true.. I like my bigger writings too.. But alas.. lack of time.

@Mahesh: Try again :D

The West Wind said...

@Neha: I know it doesnt make sense but I can totally understand u feel.. I felt the same way.. It has a sad-happy ending.. Thank U

@Comfortablynam: I am glad that it could touch u.. do keep visiting :D

@Megha: Thank U so much..

The West Wind said...

@Nils: Arre no problem.. I was also too caught up with work and stuff.. was kinda away from the blog world.. I am glad u liked it.. Thank U dear.

@Chandrika: Thank u for coming by.. do keep visiting :D

@Sorcerer: Thank U. I am glad u liked it.

buckingfastard said...

truly defining the word subtle, u never went out of ur bounds to tell it all..u let da user discover it pattern by pattern with multiple read!!

and yes happily sad endings top it...gr8 writing style!!

Charu said...

Beautiful. Felt like I was reading pure poetry. Thanks for the great read :)

By the way, I wrote my first piece of 55 fiction. Drop by if you like.

The West Wind said...

@Buckingfastard: Thank you for the kind words.. I wanted to unfold it in a way that the pattern isnt too obvious. I am happy that you thought it worked.

@Charu: Thank you for visiting. I will certainly check out ur post.. Sorry for not being in the blog world for so long. Was stuck in work.

Gyanban said...

coolness. I think the finale lives up to the story line and intensity.Quite enjoyed reading it.

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